3 Ways to Make Sentences More Concise

3 Ways to Make Sentences More Concise 3 Ways to Make Sentences More Concise 3 Ways to Make Sentences More Concise By Mark Nichol Sentences need not be pared down to essentials- the challenge is to make them as coherent as possible, not as concise as possible- but careful writers will craft and revise their writing in part by minimizing the number of words necessary to convey their thoughts. Three simple strategies are demonstrated in discussions of and revisions to the following examples of sentences that can and should be improved. 1. The board needs to be assured that management has not allowed overconfidence to be bred by past successes. Make the sentence active. Two of the three nouns in this sentence are active rather than passive, but successes can be an actor, too: â€Å"The board needs to be assured that management has not allowed past successes to breed overconfidence.† 2. The hot spots described below are areas in which providers are commonly at risk for losing revenue. They include patient access, utilization review, charge capture, and billing and payment accuracy. Fold one sentence into another. When a subsequent sentence provides details pertaining to a previous sentence, that sentence, if brief and simple enough, can often be embedded seamlessly in the first sentence as a parenthetical: â€Å"The hot spots described below- patient access, utilization review, charge capture, and billing and payment accuracy- are areas in which providers are commonly at risk for losing revenue.† 3. Scalability also considers the robustness of the processes and controls, and whether they are automated or not. Omit nonessential words. In this context, â€Å"or not† is extraneous; whether, in and of itself, suggests a binary choice: â€Å"Scalability also considers the robustness of the processes and controls and whether they are automated.† (â€Å"Or not† is sometimes a necessary companion of whether: The test is that if regardless can replace whether, the entire phrase is required.) Want to improve your English in five minutes a day? Get a subscription and start receiving our writing tips and exercises daily! Keep learning! Browse the Style category, check our popular posts, or choose a related post below:English Grammar 101: All You Need to KnowDawned vs. DonnedOppose and Opposed To